Tuesday, 29 August 2017
Sam 100WC T3W6
After working hard on my Boring math homework I decided to take a break. I went outside and felt the warmth of the sun hit me like a tornado. I then felt the fur of my labrador Bessie snuggling up to my leg and immediately felt comforted. But I noticed that it was getting darker and darker. “ Mum I think the sky is falling’!! I screamed. Then suddenly it went dark. My mum came outside and told me it was just the solar eclipse. I sighed with relief and put my sunglasses on to watch the moon cover the sun.
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Nice Sam! I really like this story because it has a complete storyline. Maybe next time think about putting unneeded capital letters in your story for example Boring. And a good idea might be adding a title only if you want to. LOve It.
ReplyDeleteNice Sam! I loved how you linked your story to what is actually happening around the world right now. Next time I think you should like the reader in so they can keep reading.
ReplyDeleteNatasha
REALLY COOL STORY I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT SAMMY Xx
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