It was a silent night I was home alone because my parents were out at a family function. Being a 10-year-old girl I was very scared of the dark, and always wondered what could be lurking in the darkness of the hallway. I turned all of the lights on in the house, locked all of the doors, shut all the curtains and kept my dad’s baseball jacket. I heard a creaking noise. As the noise came closer to my room I hid under the blankets I had a little lantern with me but then suddenly it went dark.
Tuesday 29 August 2017
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I really enjoyed this story because it had a good story line and it interested the reader. Next time you should read through it because there were a few punctuation mistakes.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the storyline, the only problem was is that you didn't use commos in the right places.
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