Wednesday 9 August 2017
Matthew Herbert 100WC T3W3
In my family I have got my Mother Father and a Sister Scarlet.My parents .are okay but they always make me do everything its so so ANNOYING!,I mean All my sister does it sit on her favorite cushion And play her violin.Mum decided to Give Scarlet some flowers for the flower bed she made in technology But nome when she looks back she wishes she saved her money for better things because Scarlet hasn’t watered them in 2 months so sadly they died.So now mum is trying different things to get Scarlet to do something different
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To improve your commas and capital letters at the right time and full stops at the same time.
ReplyDeletei will remember to for next time thanks ������
DeleteReally interesting story, maybe improve on the grammar but great job.
ReplyDeleteok i will next time ๐๐๐ thanks for the advise
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