My family was driving home from the movies when suddenly a shadow fell over the car. Me and my brother looked around and saw the strangest creature ever. It was a zebra the size of a whale, but instead of zebra legs it had two pairs of frog legs as well as a huge fish tail. As it came rushing towards us we both screamed, and Dad looked around and sped up, quickly turning corners until the preposterous thing was out of sight. We were very shaken, but as a prank decided not to tell the police about the monster.
Monday 21 August 2017
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Good story Emma! I liked how you used your imagination in your story and made your zebra different sizes! I wasn't quite sure about what happened and where?
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