As I sat down on a cushion listening to my annoying sister Scarlett practicing her stupid violin. I couldn’t stop thinking about that extraordinary pig walking down the street this morning, it had the most unusual skin it was almost fluffy with yellow highlights. I had just watered the plants and was heading back inside when I saw it. It completely took me by surprise, it was making these weird sounds, which sounded exactly like my sister horrid violin. After listening to my sister for awhile my dad rushed in. “ Look what I got”. It was the exact same pig.
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