100WC T3W2
The oak tree stood overpowering the sun. Scarlet and I would climb it everyday to see who got to the top. The leaves fall down like hats at a graduation. We climbed as high as we could until we ached. I was a lot higher than Scarlet but I kept slipping. A dark cloud formed in the sky. Drops fell landing on me, Scarlet had reached the bottom and was yelling my name. But then the flash made me…. I soared down the tree breaking all the branches. The last thing I remember was never being able to walk again.
Rylee
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