I was in space somewhere when I was getting made I can’t remember that much but all I know is that it was weird. So here’s all I remember I was in space and on a conveyor belt of some sort and it was just pushing me and the others along. But then we got to this part which was like a box but you didn't come out and then it was my turn I went in but then the flash made me i was pretty scared but I was a normal human and that is how i was made.
Tuesday 1 August 2017
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I really liked the way you structured the story and how you were a normal human and then everything.Next time you write you need to remember you can't start a sentence with but and just remember to use capital letters.
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