“Lora come here Kora wants to take a photo of you in your prom dress.” “ok coming” Lora waddles over to the old rusted grey camera. “Ok ready” “say cheese” “Cheese” { click click } everything was fine but then the flash made me grow. “Ahhhh” my clothes began to tear and rip. My skin quickly turned a scaly green and my hair poured of my head like a waterfall until I just had two inches left of hair. My muscles began to grow, doubling the size of my head. Ahhhhhhh whats going on? … Now everybody calls me the she hulk.
Tuesday, 1 August 2017
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ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this because you made it interesting because you went from talking about a pretty girl in a pretty dress all excited to go to prom and then it changes to a sad moment when she describes how she transformed into the HULK!!!.
ReplyDeleteI think that next time you should make sure it makes sense for example {hair poured of my head}.