One gloomy day, when the rain was pouring outside, the sun was hiding behind the dark clouds, and the whole ground was watered, so we couldn’t do much outside. I didn’t care because all I liked to do was sit on my favourite cushion that has a bunny drawn on it, and practice for my violin contest the next month. Suddenly someone bangs into my room, I look at her and she looks back at me, I could feel my heart thumping in my chest. At the door stood my annoying cousin Scarlet that I haven’t seen in 4 years...
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