Tuesday, 15 August 2017
Alice T3WK4 100WC
Jim Seeler the seal seems like your everyday wild seal. Playing, eating like every other seal…. But there is a little twist, Jim is actually an undercover animal spy who fights killer whales off and saves the good citizens of Seal Town. Jim loves to smile and laugh at the villains he has just executed. His current mission is: killer whale [John] is coming in from the South East and he is eyeing up a new born Seal baby and its mother. Jim doesn’t waste one more second, he power kicks the killer whale and it swims away in defeat.
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wow bro jim sounds like a cool guy cool storry
ReplyDeleteI really like this story because it has a complete storyline.
ReplyDeleteMaybe you could have more action and don't have as much detail. Even detail
Hello Alice,
ReplyDeleteFrom your story, it seems you understand the danger killer whales are for seals, especially pups. I liked your idea where Jim Seeler is an undercover animal spy who is tasked with protecting other seals. Well done.
Orcinus orca (killer whales), the largest member of the dolphin family, are magnificent animals. Their intelligence and ability to work together also make them a threat to seals and whales along Australia's coast but the idea of a secret agency of seals would mean life would a little more difficult for orca. I wonder if orca have a counterspy undercover agency at work? Perhaps that would be another adventure of spy on spy... James Seeler 007, licenced to power kick orca.
Keep sharing your creative ideas.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia