James T3 W3
Hi I am at school orchestra with a girl named Scarlet and many other students. she plays the violin and so do I. For some reason she plays on a cushion but I don't ask. We where in a nice concert and a very annoying lady shouted you suck but we kept on playing. When we got to the end of our orchestra pieces everybody clapped but she didn't. when we started packing up the instruments the lady walked passed us with a grumpy face. I got home and watered the plants, did the dishes and practiced more violin.
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