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Roaming the streets of London, I block the sun from my eyes. I stroll with my bags in my hands. I love the smell of flowers through the city. Then suddenly it went dark. I looked at my watch to see what the time was but I couldn’t see. I looked up to the sky to see what was going on and there were loud screams throughout the city. The moon was over the sun. It was the first time I’ve experienced an eclipse (I was excited). Everyone was running and hiding but I stayed on the streets watching it.
Tuesday, 29 August 2017
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Really cool. I liked your story
ReplyDeleteCool bananas!! Loved the eclipse part.
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe you can use a variety of sentence lengths.
Great story I really liked the way you linked ideas.
ReplyDeleteNext time remember to have commas in the story but apart from that GREAT STORY.