Sunday 13 August 2017

Benji T3W5

Jerry and stan are two seals who live in a San Francisco Bay. One fine day a couple no-good kids came strolling down the bay, they were laughing and pointing at Jerry and stan, stan went around the back of them and knocked a couple of chairs behind their legs. Jerry was still distracting the people. While he was stan managed to quickly swim beneath where the people were laughing and jumped out of the water leaping past them back into the water, frightening them so much they fell into the water. All seals laughed hard very hard that day.

10 comments:

  1. It was a good story but some of it didn't make sense for example - One fine day a couple no-good kids

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    1. ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ
      I will look at it ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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  2. I really liked stan went around the back of them and knocked a couple of chairs behind their legs because he smacks the kids with chairs.

    I think you need to look at this bit While he was stan managed to because it does not make sense.

    Max

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    1. ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ Max I think you read it wrong it looks right to me. ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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  3. very good Benji. but next time instead of saying no-good kids maybe say bad kids. someone other then matthew

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    1. Thanks for the advice Mathew I will look into it ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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  4. Funny story, but could of used more constructive language.

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    1. Ok Ryan thanks for the feedback xD ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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  5. oh and maybe next time you should say while jerry was distracting people stan ...

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    1. I did "Jerry was still distracting the people"

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