Corbin 100WC T3W5
Me and my friend Kody were running down the mountain. We took a two minute break so we looked up at the mountain. Kody chatted to me “I hear some strange noises” “No it’s just the bird’s Kody”, I’m not joking I can hear something”. Then the ground started rumbling “can you hear it now Kody yelled” “ of course I can” “ you should have told me that in the first place”. Me and Kody glanced up oh no it’s a landslide. As it came rushing towards as, well we would do what anyone else would do run for our life's.
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