There once was a very fat seal pup who loved to go swimming. One day the seal pup saw a massive fat sea lion swimming where she normally swam and then it went to eat a baby penguin but the sea lion hit its face on the rocks that were covered in penguin poo. That made the seal pup burst into laughter it made the seal pups day but the sea lion saw the that the seal pup was laughing so it went over to attack it but the seal pup got away just by an inch of her life.
Thursday 17 August 2017
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ReplyDeleteIts very funny Max well done Maybe next time put a full stop on =the end
ReplyDeleteThink about adding a full stop at the end
ReplyDeleteReally like your story. Make sure that you use capital letters and full stops in the right places (at the end) Nice work !
ReplyDelete- Rylee