I was on a boat with 1 person called Bob. It was night it was pouring with rain. and you couldn't see a single thing except Bob. We ate dinner but not a relaxing dinner because the boat was making things fly everywhere all over the floor. After we finished eating dinner Jeff and I checked the lobster nets and they were going fine but all of a sudden there was a boom and a flash lightning but then the flash made me into a monster and I didn't realise but I did when Bob jumped off the small boat.
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