The thunder was as loud as a gunshot,
I could feel the ground vibrate. It was making
my ears ring. I was getting groceries for
my housewarming party tonight. I only
had two hours to get home and cook
dinner for tonight. I was desperate to
leave but the storm was getting worse.
I was going to make a run for it. My house
was only a 20 minute walk. I ran outside
my hands full of groceries. But then the
flash made me turn invisible. I then realised
that I had been hit what was I going to do?
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