Grace
I saw this really cute little puppy down the road. As it came rushing towards us a put my hands out to catch it. I heard aloud noise and all of a sudden a bunch of dust swarmed around me. I couldn't see the little puppy anymore. Gray dark dust Lots of loud noises all around me. Bang! I felt myself lift up and be thrown back landing on the cold hard ground.As I lay there the little puppy came and lay on my chest. Me and the little puppy lived happy ever after the end.
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