100 Words
As I crept up to the old haunted and creepy two story house I felt a shiver go down my spine. “ I have to do this. Its for Lucy. You can do this”. When my foot hit the first step leading up into the spooky and intimidating house there was a flash of lighting. In the flash of lighting I saw Lucy writhing around on the ground with a strongly built man in the corner of the room. She looked as if she was in pain, she needed me. I will find my bestfriend and I will save her.
-Sam
No comments:
Post a Comment
I really liked . . . because . . .
I really liked the way you . . .
I enjoyed reading this because . . .
It was especially good when you . . . because . . .
I think you need to . . . because . . .
Next time you write . . .
Think about adding . . .
Have you thought about . . .
To improve your . . . try . . .
Perhaps you could . . .