Tuesday 6 June 2017

Ryan 100WC T2WC

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It was the 1st of may 2014 and baby boy Tim was just born. Tim was a smart,clever,funny and cheeky young boy. Tim was an only child, he only lives with him mum.Besides that Tim has never ever had a bath. Little boy Tim dreams all night and day about having a bath but sadly his mum is not going to let him have one anytime soon because she believes that he’s too young. But one day Tim went for a bath without his mum’s permission, he loved it but suddenly the water just kept gushing out.

By Ryan Mitchell

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