Thursday 8 June 2017

Corbin T2W6

In the water just kept gushing out fish it was flapping out of the at 68mph. John on the boat yelled out to his dad that the fish seemed strange it's just a marlin yelled his dad. Boom out of the middle came a megalodon gulping up the boat with one swallow John and his dad was never seen again. But the mystery is what is this megalodon. Everyone in the world was terrified it was on the tv the newspaper and all over the world. This megalodon was twice as big as a Great white. Then it happened.

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