Thursday, 1 June 2017
Ryan
100 words
Once upon a time in 1945 a spontaneous, beautiful baby called Robertson jr was born in the beautiful but also loud city itself called San Francisco, America. Growing up through his baby and teenage years he loved animals. When he saw a beautiful animal in the zoo he would just light up and read all about it,he loved animals. For his job he became one of the San Francisco Zookeepers. He loved it, but one night when walking home ‘in the flash of lightning he saw’ the zoo. He loved and cared for was sadly getting bombed and destroyed.
By Ryan Mitchell
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