Thursday, 8 June 2017

Grace T2W6

I thought that I might run myself a bath. As the bath was running I made myself a nice hot chocolate with 3 fluffy marshmallows on it. Then i sat at my desk doing my homework. Tik tok tik tok 1 hour later ……. Whys the flour wet ? OMG i ran faster than i ever have before.As I went to turn the tap off the handle broke! I didn't know what todo water just kept gushing out.The flour was covered with water.I tried buckets , plastic bags cups but I couldn't stop the water. Finally mums home.
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  1. Anonymous8 June 2017 at 19:33

    Amazing story Grace! loved the idea that's very creative!
    Maybe next time you can add more punctuation.
    From Alice ;]

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