Once upon a time there was a little girl named Lily who was the princess of Windel town. Lilly had a little brother named Gabe. Gabe and Lily also had a older sister named Isabelle. Isabelle was a lot older than her siblings so she was going to be the next queen. Isabelle never played with Lilly or Gabe.
One night there was a storm with thunder and lightning. Lily, Gabe, the Queen and King all ran towards me. I opened the door for them but in the flash of lightning I saw Isabelle, and that as the last day of her...
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