Grace
On know chocolate mountain fall again and it's blocking the way to mushmellow valley. The poor little M&M people will be devastated Because it's blocking the way to their homes.I have 1 hour to fix it before everyone comes home from their jobs. Ok so all i have to do is move the thick chocolate syrup that came out of chocolate mountain and the road will be clear. So that's what i did and just in time . All the little M&M people cried .They were all very thankful . All the M&M people got back in there gummybear cars and went home.
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