Thursday 1 June 2017

Connor

In the flash of lightning, I saw the man he was standing in the middle of the desert dressed up as clown. My heart dropped like a fly he had a gun and it was pointing straight at my heart.
I was so confuzzled because the clown just shot the bullet and it went straight into the man's heart standing next to me who I hadn't seen. I was then surrounded by police cars.
The back of the police car was hard and bumpy like a rock.


6 years in jail ordered the judge my lawyer who was my brother was absolutely useless.  









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