I was walking down the pathway when I saw a little girl at the bus stop alone. The little girl was holding a teddy and a little pink school bag. I walked up to her and asked her “Where are you off to little one?” the little girl didn’t reply, I asked her again “Where are you off to little one?” once again no reply. I decided she was being very rude so I turned her around but as I did water started pouring out of her mouth, I didn't know what to do, the water just kept gushing out.
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