Wednesday 7 June 2017

Madison

I walked towards the school water fountain.
I heard my name so I turned around to see
who called me, It was my science teacher
Mr Reynolds. He walked towards me, I felt
a rush of fear because he is scary. Then I
felt something on my feet, I looked down,
there was water surrounding me. I turned
around to see where it was coming from, It
was coming from the water fountain because
it had a hole in it. The person that was drinking
from the fountain was soaked because the
water just kept gushing out like a waterfall.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Madison,
    Thank you for visiting our Class Blog.
    I enjoyed reading your story.
    I wonder why your science teacher filled you with fear? I feel there's another story in the making here.
    I couldn't but feel sorry for the person at the fountain.
    Good work this week.
    Mrs Boyce
    Cork.

    https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/

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