Tuesday 20 June 2017

Ashtons 100wc W8

My name is Jamie Williams I was a victim of the biggest egg crack in the world. Yock covered the whole city also me. Before the attack of the egg, I was doing my job like normal. All of a sudden I hear a ferocious rumble then crash! through the building "aaaa!" I heard screaming and shouting from the other side of the building I ran as fast as I could down the emergency stairs. Five floors down until finally I made it I opened the door and all this gooey liquid. Thats when everything went black.

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