Sunday 25 June 2017

Madison

I was at the beach. It was extremely hot, I felt like
I was on fire. I could feel the sun burning on my back.
I got up to finally go for a swim, I hadn’t had a swim in ages.
I got into the water, it was so refreshing. I dove underwater.
I could feel sweet sensation on my skin. I swam to the surface.
I started to feel cold. I opened my eyes. The sky was black,
but then weather changed dramatically. The sun was out again.
I felt a tingle run down my spine. What was happening?

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