The Storm
One day me and my friends decided to watch a movie at my house. We were on our own and a bit nervous. The forecast wasn't good. We were only sixteen.After 20 minutes of watching the movie, I decided to get some snacks. I walked over to the kitchen then suddenly I saw flashing blue lightning outside the clear window. I was petrified so I ran and jumped back on the couch. It started to pour, the rain hit the roof like bullets. The water just kept gushing out of the pipe. That was the worst storm.
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