Sunday 12 November 2017

100 WC Ryan

Sup i’m Kevin, and i’m a bad man who does bad stuff. When I do Bad stuff it necessarily means I rob banks for a living. I make good money and I have hot sexy wife called Meli. I’ve had massive heists, like when I stole $2.9 billion from the man himself Bill Gates. When I stole $2.9 billion it was all in cash but where would we hide it all. Me and my crew stored it in a small island west of the pacific sea. So that’s my life, live life just like me. Please live life.

2 comments:

  1. cool story ryan really funny, maybe not repeat as much.

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  2. Good story Ryan. I liked your description about Kevin, it was different and interesting. Maybe next time don't write it from Kevin's perspective and write the story from a narrator's perspective of Kevin. and 'I'm' has a capital 'I'.

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