I had never seen an ocean so beautiful. Memories of my mother and father. The white and blue waves bowed down to the rough sand dragging some back with it. The cloud even looked fluffy, the sun ensured that we pack our sunblock and sunglasses. This was the first time I looked at the world in a different way since 3 months ago. After a day of swimming, we celebrated the end by making the best bonfire that I had since the day that I hated of thinking of for ages but today the flames and singing, reminded of my dead parents that I came to this beach with. I can't wait for tomorrow.
Wednesday, 1 November 2017
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I really like the story Natasha.A bit sad but good.I liked how you underlined the words that are used in the prompt.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story.
ReplyDeleteNext time check that it makes sense such as ( that I hated of thinking of ).