A few years ago, a mother and father decided they needed a break, so they wanted to head out for a night on the town. They called their most trusted babysitter. When the babysitter arrived, the two children were already fast asleep in bed. So it was a pretty easy job.
Later that night, the babysitter got bored and went to watch TV, but she couldn't watch it downstairs because they did not have cable for the TV. So she called the parents and asked them if she could watch TV in the parents' room. Of course, the parents said, but the babysitter had one final request... she asked if she could cover up the statue outside the bedroom window with a blanket, because it made her nervous.
That was the last they ever heard of the babysitter.
When the parents got home the children were still there but not the Babysitter...
Sunday, 19 November 2017
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Great Connor maybe next time do it properly
ReplyDeleteGood Story! I liked your story line. Try Using 100 words though.
ReplyDeleteGood work! I liked how you built suspense in your story. Next time maybe change your text to be bigger so it is easier to read.
ReplyDeleteGood job Connor I liked your story line but maybe next time write 100 words and put capital letters after every full stop and make your sentences make sense.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your advice but the text size won't change
ReplyDeleteWell done on your entry Connor. You've done a great job creating a mysterious story.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you incorporated the statue into your story. Great writing. Well done.
Ms Brennock
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