Tuesday, 14 November 2017

Corbin 100WC T4W5

Me, Trevor and Franklin just robbed a bank today we had a really satisfying plan. Our plan was to stop all the security cameras then go into the bank with assault shotguns and carbon rifles and blow it up. And guess what we did. We blew it up, all you could hear was Bang Bang Bang! as we raced out of the bank shooting cops down like never before while jumping into the helicopter. When we got to Michael's house Trevor yells “Were Rich” and Franklin said “but where would we hide it all”. Michael said don't worry I’ve got a place for it.

2 comments:

  1. Good story! I really liked your story line, next time maybe add a few more descriptive words so I can paint a picture in my head.

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  2. I like your story line of a crime scene.
    Next time make sure that it makes sense and that the order of sentences go together.

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