I grabbed my sandwiched as I hurried out the door. I wasn't feeling very energetic today in fact my head was pounding, I swear I needed a battery to get me going. I was astonished by the time. 7:55, I didn't realise I was so late. I speed down the hill, my eyes shut as the wind ran through my hair. Opening my eyes I came to the realisation, if i didn't stop now i'ld go flying into the road filled with traffic. The momentum continued to carry me, even as i tried to stop. It happen in slow motion. I tripped, and went tumbling through the air, my legs couldn’t keep up and landed smack on the tarmac. White spots danced and flickered in front of my eyes.
Wednesday, 29 November 2017
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Hi Charlie,
ReplyDeleteGreat work! I really liked your use of the "battery" prompt word. This is one of my favourite uses of it that I've read so far. I especially like the way you varied your sentence lengths and types throughout. It made the story flow really well and very easy to read. Finally, I liked the interesting choice of verbs in the last sentence. It built up a vivid image. Keep up the good work.
Michael (Team 100wc), Warwick, UK.