Red, yellow and orange flames wildly tossed in the air. This was the show that the swimming race was beginning. Three, two, one ( splash. ) Competitors flew through the deep pool. People screamed there names, cheering them on. The competitors swam with all their energy, wasted in the end. When it was over everybody celebrated and congratulated one in other. “Attention” called a tall guy he was wearing a white top and denim ripped jeans. “ Just a reminder tomorrow finals will be held here. So I suggest you all get a good nights rest and stay hydrated for the finals tomorrow.
Wednesday 1 November 2017
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Great story. Remember next time to put commas in sentences and in the right place. Also put fullstops in the right place.
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