I was eating my sandwich when a very energetic white robot hurried by in a rush, I wondered where it was going and why it was in a rush. I followed it through the halls of my school, out the gate and into the city. I knew I shouldn't've been there but it was just so interesting watching this kind of robot thingy run. It crashed, I'm not sure how but I was chasing after it and next thing I know it’s electrical wires and everything were splattered against a wall. I looked over and saw that its battery was broken.
Tuesday, 28 November 2017
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I really like your story line Poppy.
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure that it all makes sense.