I was running so fast for about 20 minutes, till I was sure it had stopped chasing me then I collapsed to the floor in desperate need of water. I could see the bright stars in the dark sky and knew that was my last time seeing them. When I opened my eyes the figure that chased me to this place was standing right in front of me with a knife.
(5 years later)- New Reporter: ''Today we stand here at the spot of Jackson Height's mysterious death, 5 years ago police found the body of him dead for hours in this very sport. To remember this death civilians raised money to put a statue here of a dark figure to make everyone remember the bravery of the boy.''
Tuesday, 21 November 2017
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I liked your story. I especially liked the storyline and how you changed to (5 years later).
ReplyDeleteI really love your story! Maybe next time go over it to make sure it makes sense.
ReplyDeleteGreat work! I loved your story, especially when you changed how you wrote the story. I couldn't find any mistakes so good job!
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