“The quest continues” I mumble as I dream the all the magical, mystical and marvelous adventures. Some with goblins singing, ballerinas transforming and dolphins playing hopscotch. One of my favorite dreams was when there was a girl who know one knew. No one believed in and no one took the time to know her. But she could do the impossible. Once I had a dream that she was in an underground cave with ninjas attacking her, she had a camera that recorded one sentence. “But where would we hide it” I’m just guessing she had to hide some gold coins.
Sunday, 12 November 2017
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Great work! I liked how you started the story off with speech. Next time make sure your story makes sense as one sentence didn't. Eg:I mumble as I dream the all the magical
ReplyDeleteI liked your story.
ReplyDeleteNext time check for spelling mistakes and that it makes sense.
( favourite ) and ( I mumble as I dream the all the magical,).
Nice Story Jordi! Try adding more punctuation also double check you spelling. Apart from that Good Job!
ReplyDeleteNice job Jordi I like how you started your story with a speech and a question it sucks the reader in more.
ReplyDeleteNice job Jordi I like how you started your story with a speech and a question it sucks the reader in more.
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