Monday, 20 November 2017
Ashton 100WC T4 W6
"RUN!" I heard a grown man scream, I didn't know what he was doing but I soon realised that he was on to something. I could see a dark shape emerging form around a corner. Then the shape started running and I soon became aware he was running at me with something in his hand, so my instinct decision was to run and so I did that like It was the last thing I would do before I died. I could hear closing footsteps so I sidestepped to the left and ran down an alleyway until I had come to a dead end. "NO!" I screamed. I couldn't do anything, he grabbed me and then It was all black.
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Love the range of sentence lengths, remember to not use random capitals in a sentence.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story Ashton. It had heaps of really good descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure that it all makes sense.