Monday, 20 November 2017

Sam 100WC T4 W6

As Lily and I trudged down to the old school bus in the blazing hot sun I immediately regretted taking history. We were about to walk around the boring museum (which was not to my taste). Our class went straight to the war exhibit, which was quite interesting at first but Lily didn’t like thinking about the things that happened. The teacher gave us permission to go back to the entrance and wait for them there. But we got lost. We stumbled upon a statue of a person, “wow that looks so realistic” Lily exclaimed. But then it started moving….


1 comment:

  1. Sam,

    I enjoy reading your story. I like the way you build up how you stumbled upon the statue.

    Boring museum???

    The climax makes me think of weeping angels from Dr. Who.

    Best wishes.

    Mrs. trivedi-Ziemba (Team 100 WC, USA)
    http://trivediziemba.edublogs.org/
    @TrivediZiemba

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