Sunday, 12 November 2017

Bradley 100WC T4W5

Halloween is just around the corner and I’ve got my costume all picked out and sorted I’m going to be a Frankenstein monster and fill up my trousers with candy because of how loose the pants will be I’ve planned out that I’ll leave the house at
4 o’clock and come back home at around 8 o'clock then my trousers will be filled with candy plus my pillow case that I’ll take along with me. But were will I hide it all? My parents can’t find out that I’ve got massive amounts of candy in my room, wish me luck.

2 comments:

  1. Great story bradley I like the theme. Next time try to use more interesting vocab.

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  2. Funny story Bradley, rember to put in some more full stops, or commas!

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