The hidden stash!
“Look all we have to do is create a distraction, sneak in there, grab the stash and hide it till schools out. Harry, you rough up some year 12’s, to get Mr Haggett out of the office”. Neville, Go in and ask Mrs White for the set of school keys for ‘ a teacher’. I'll be behind you, pass Haggett's office key to me. I'll go in, snatch the candy and pass it out the window to Jim. “That sounds good Tom but where would we hide it all?” asked Neville nervously ”That's the best part” I explained with enthusiasm.
Wow! I really liked your story but I especially liked how you wrote it mostly in speech. Next time maybe add in short sentences to build suspense. Overall it was a great story!
ReplyDeleteI loved your describing words like enthusiasm.
ReplyDeleteNext time you could put more speech marks in.
Nice story charlie really like your describing words but maybe next time use shorter sentences to build suspense
ReplyDeleteI loved how you used the sentence and the ending.
ReplyDeleteNext time add more punctuation.