There was John and his friends, climbing on shipping container in rural Jamaica. John was climbing to the top of one when he slipped down and knocked the door open. When he saw huge boxes and boxes of something. Curiously he slowly opens one of the first boxes to find it full to the brim of the purest carrot quality diamonds. He called his 3 friends over too look.
“We need to take this, it will make us rich” Steve exclaimed.
“Yeah but where would we hide it all” asked Chris.
They managed to hide and sell the diamonds succesfully.
Love the story benji next time make sure your sentences make sense, for example 'climbing on shipping container'.
ReplyDeleteLove you story and describing words like curiously.
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure that you use commas more often like: Curiously, he slowly.
Great describing words, just make sure your story makes sense.
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