I feel the cold sharp blade of a knife plunge into my heart. That was the end.
The foggy moonlight beam reflects off my bike lights. I ride through the empty town looking around wondering what happened. Seeing something further ahead, wants me to go closer but I stop. The black shadow walks towards me and my eyes pierce to his. Suddenly i’m face to face with my worst enemy, a shiver dribbles down my spine. A long black coat drapes down almost touching the ground. His hand slowly moves out from behind his coat. The blade stands forth from me. Guess what happened next...
Wow! I really liked how you used some very good describing words, that suit the storyline. I loved how you have made some suspense for the reader next and even in your first sentence you hooked the reader in well. Maybe give away some hints about who it is, so the reader wants to more even about what is happening. Also 'I'm' has a capital 'I'
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