Thursday, 2 November 2017

Emma 100WC T4W1

BASH! The criminal tripped over a chair, but luckily no one on the beach heard. He carefully lit a fire, held the match to the wooden wall and ran away through the house. Tomorrow he’d come back and see how much damage he had caused. A minute later the people swimming in the ocean, who were celebrating a birthday party, all stopped and stared as they simultaneously noticed the flame curling around the house on the shore.  The white painted wood slowly turned black and fell apart. Everybody was watching, but nobody noticed the person dressed in black sneaking away.

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