Wednesday 8 November 2017

Natasha 100WC T4W4

It rushes right in front of Peter like no big deal. No. It can't be, He keeps telling himself it's an illusion but he just can't get it through his head. All his hard research of gathering evidence these past 5 years, and then the subject can't just rush in front of him just like that! When Peter was young living in Sunnydale he saw two ghosts clear as crystal, talking to each other like they were normal people. Then when he told everyone what he had witnessed of course nobody believed him. So for the past 5 years Peter has tried to prove everyone wrong. In that moment Peter shook his head in disbelief and ran after his evidence...

2 comments:

  1. I like that you ended the story with an ellipses. Next time use a comma after "No" because a full stop indicates the end of a sentence, where you were most likely looking for a short pause.

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  2. I like the different varieties of sentence next time maybe think about different language.

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