It’s halloween. I’m scared of halloween because people tell you about Killer Clown’s and the movie IT. So I decided to ditch School and go to Central France Where all the nice people were. I was so scared I went up to someone screaming to them “I need shelter” but they didn't listen. Then I did it again, again and again and they didn't listen. I thought to myself “Well that’s strange”. So I went up to someone and pulled their coat. But all of a sudden my hands slip of the coat. Then I found out what I was. I was a GHOST!!!
I really liked your story line. Maybe next time you could add more structure to your story to have a nice flowing story.
ReplyDeleteI really like your story! Maybe next time put some describing words in there.
ReplyDeleteWe enjoyed reading your story because we have a few people in our class who feel the same way about Hallowe'en. We also liked the little twist at the end of your story. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHey Corbin! That's a cool story which matches the prompt well. Just remember to check through and edit your writing - for example: Clowns (no apostrophe) and Central France, where all the nice people were (use of a comma and better word than nice).
ReplyDeleteKeep writing!
From Mr Hales - North Norfolk, England, UK - #TEAM100wc
I liked your story, but I was a bit confused with the whole story line. Next time try to be a bit more clear.
ReplyDelete