Sunday, 19 November 2017
Matthew 100WC WK6 T4
I was strolling through Hamilton park singing when I saw him.A tall man wearing a cloak hiding his face,He stood with his hands together he turned to look at me and said in a deep voice “Your time has come!” he uncoupled his hands and a massive scythe popped out nowhere,I tried to run but my legs were frozen where they were a chill went up my spine I wanted to scream for help or get my phone and call 111 but I was stuck, speechless shocked,He started moving towards me a deathly trail following behind.
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I liked you story matthew. I thought how you used speech was really good. Proofread and try add a few more spaces.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story matthew, You used great descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure that it makes sense for example - frozen where they were a chill went up my spine I
Nice story Matthew I like how you used some speech in your story but maybe next time put spaces after every full stop and comma
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